da boy in rain..

[mritticool]

the boy in rain

a friend of mine inspired me 2 write dis. i dedicate dis song 2 him...n u cn smell his presence actually...wrote dis on 11 th march.of dis yr.durin my exam preparation..hehe (gues wt he belongs 2 golponet!!)

he sits in da rain
with cig in his hand
clutched between fingers
unlike a magic wand
the end glowin red
rain cant douse it off
rings of smoke form
as he takes one more puff

the rain keeps on fallin
the wind keeps on callin
if u see,don hurt him
he 's a boy filled wid pain
the smoke's disappearin
he sits there,not movin
if u want 2 look 4 him
u ll find him in the rain

he sits in the rain
his shadow drenched,wet
cig falls,he catches it
b4 its 2 late
the end glows red
the only light in dark
the rings of smoke
only make a temporary mark

he's as silent as the night
the cig' s never out of his sight
he loves 2 sit in the rain
waitin 4 it 2 wash away the pain..

[mritticool]

blessings -

wrote dis on 23 oct 05

wat do u want?
y did u cum?
where were u all these time
wen i needed u da most?
u didnt bother
u didnt care
2 show up in da right time
wen i ws nuthin but lost

god,don need ur blessings now
don need ur help
finally made it 2 my death bed
on my own, widout u
u may shower dem on sum1 else
sum1 like me
who waited 4 yrs
for his prayers 2 cum true...

called u day n nite
but u didnt answer
where were u all these time
wen life turned its bak 2 me...
u didnt cum
u didnt respond
wen i lived like a blind man
da world 2 dark 4 me 2 c

all i asked 4 was blessings
but dey seemed 2 b missin
wen i lived my life in shame
only death can now kiss away my pain..

mrittika

[azif]

wow!!! jotoi dekhchi totoi mugdho hochi. liked both of them. good writtin keep up girl!!!

[Icy]

Oh honey!! First one ta beshi joss .. Porertao valo.. But first one ta obviously beshi beshi beshi joss ..

[jigSAW]

if I judge both of them in one thread, that will be just not right. I should speak on them separately. otherwise, this will only loosen the weight of each poem

saying all these, let me just make my concluding remarks.....

No.1> True reflection of a boy in Grief. sharing his sorrow with a cigerette in his hand and raindrops washing away his teardrops. Unique presentation style. worth applause!

No.2> Almost a mirror reflection of the sadness of the Girl in the same respect (?) again uniqueness is worth praise on a good extent.

I can see a Rising Star in a developing stage you should continue! and provide us with more Food for thoughts

[_MuHaI_]

Joss hoise duitai...1st ta iktu beshi joss... Shundor writing... Keep it upp!!!

[Neo]

very nice, very very nice, i am talking about the first one obviously, second ones alright, but i really like the first one, good stuff buddy!!

[Twink]

yes LOooooooooooooooooooooOVE da first one....
da second onez good too...but LOVE first one...
okay i think u got da idea....
but yes awesum poem....

[darkcrunk]

One work --> UNIQUE

[Lamia]

Wow! Really awsome! Great work i must say! : Keep it going n thanks for sharing..