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05-28-2006, 01:52 PM
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aamiR
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05-28-2006, 02:31 PM
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krishnochura
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nice poem vai.... |
05-28-2006, 03:10 PM
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_MuHaI_
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Bhaloi hoise AAMIR BHAI 
I've treated you the best i could, I realize that i dont need you... |
05-28-2006, 04:09 PM
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SenSeTransp()rt
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According to your standard of writing, It should've been better.
the starting was good, but the 2nd para, expression incomplete, feels like forcefully written there.
I can understand that. But, overall, that's a nice one.
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05-28-2006, 04:29 PM
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Sheikh Jalil
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Simply great! Darun lekha!! Bhasha sohoj kintu bhab gombhir. I'm impressed. Aro likhun aamiR.. |
05-29-2006, 08:45 PM
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Lamia
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Really awesome! Love it.. thanks for sharing..  |
05-30-2006, 09:35 PM
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BaNNa
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hm vai vallagse poem poira...but edaning tomar dekhi pattai nai ..kahini ki?...lekha lekhi chaira dila naki? jogajog o nai dekhi.... |
05-30-2006, 09:50 PM
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aamiR
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Originally Posted by SenSeTransp()rt According to your standard of writing, It should've been better.
the starting was good, but the 2nd para, expression incomplete, feels like forcefully written there.
I can understand that. But, overall, that's a nice one. | thnx for ur valuable comment. actualy ami erokom kono comment khujtesilam..
thik...poem ta likhe amio khushi hoite parinai...but eitar ekta kahinio ase... ek boro vai gaan koren...uni hotath bashai aiya bolen ekhkhoni ekta gaan likhe daw...ami tokhon unake boshiye khub quick eita likhsi...ar gaan ektu edik-odik hoile beparna...tune valo hoile ar kotha thakbena
ar banna vai ami asi...ami ekhon beshi likhtesi...so time paitesina... |
05-31-2006, 12:29 AM
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Icy
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A good one bro.. .. |
05-31-2006, 12:33 AM
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CutE_CupiD
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