The Memory of Twilight

[IbLIsH]

You came in twilight
Sat face to face,
Opening the heart
None knows when
The selfish time is gone.
I seemed, you left
Many conversation were told
My heart isn't stone
But not to be said.

Rise your blossom eyes
In my heart's canvas.
Stored pains in my depth soul
Break down the circle of time
To arrange the FIRST NIGHT
Between you and I,
Shall I see what couldn't be seen ?

I feel fresh by weeping
But a new sorrow covering life
Ends my dream after coming the dark evening
But leaving forever in my heart
Only the memory of Twilight.

[soulful zombie]

thaz awesum

[IbLIsH]

tanku penku fo ur comments...

[jigSAW]

Phrase and idioms needs to be developed. Words are understandable; however, somehow, it doesn’t seem like an English Poetry, it’s more like a Bengali Poem translated hastily for school magazine. Poetries are nothing but playing with words, and presenting it with unique blending of stanzas. It's an art.
You have future, but, I suggest better start trying improving your mother tongue (i.e. Bangla) first. After enriching the word knowledge, then try for foreign language.

[IbLIsH]

thnx fo ur advice...

[Pristine]

bhaiya bhalo hoise...but kichu kichu jaygay ektu gap pore gese....arektu carefully describe korle bodhoy bhalo hoto...after all its a poem..conversation akare hoye geche...but i respect ur feelings vro...bhalo hoise

[angelmorn]

is this your "OWN" work ?

[self_shattered]

though there was mistakes
but it is great
i liked that
mostly this lines

Rise your blossom eyes
In my heart's canvas.