Mystery Maker wrote some poems... - Page 2

Mystery Maker · #11 (**permalink**) 06-24-2007, 01:00 PM

I just came up with this. Appreoximately 15 minutes writing time. Definitely there will be some heavy editting later on , but this is how it stands now . I hope you all enjoy it. It is a poem carrying a subliminal message. It's quite simple, only dumb door knobs wouldn't get the messege

P.S. Oh and also, if any of you guys and gals have any better words for use, or any better title, just shoot. I'd be more than delighted to be helped out here. I'm getting rusty at Bangla these days!!!

heres another 1

Proshno

Shopno dekha, shopno dekhey ki laabh hobey bolo?
Ashaey thaka, ashaey thekey ki ar pabey aaro?
Meghey dhaka, meghey dhakha shurjo lukiey,
Trishnaey thaka, trishnartho thakbo amra shobai, robo gutiey.

Miththey kotha aar shamajik alochonaey,
Rikhto kor'ey keno bedhey rakho shob shomoy?
Ondho korey bedhey dao chokhey kapor,
Nijeder niyei nijerai shudhu bhabo.....tobey bhabo na? - Ei ki tobey shesh?

Dhorshon aka, dhorshon aka kotojon'er aaj bodon'ey?
Smriti'r pata, smriti'r pataey shey shopner shoron'ey.
Mrittu dhaka, tobey mrittu eriey joy paey ba kojoney?
Alo'r katha, alor kathaey lotaey kar shorir'ey aaj ei dojjal gogon'ey?

Tader boro kotha, aar dolio lorai, shomajer koto upokar,
Upokar korey sheyshey kojonaa? Dekheki tara? - naa dekhey naa?
Kothaey achey, joto dawa toto paowa, tobey amra'ee keno paina?
Moder shopno tobey ki ekhanei shesh?
Tobey ki shob'ee chilo miththey chuth o baeyna?

Judhdho koro, judhdho koro, shomjaey shobai egiey cholo.
Ekaki boley lukiey thekonaa, barao tomar konththoshshor.
Bechey nebey tobey Shotte'r pujari uporey moha jaatishshor.

AngeL_EyeZ · #12 (**permalink**) 06-24-2007, 09:14 PM

Shopno dekhey ki laabh hobey bolo?
Ashaey thekey ki pabey bolo?
Megher arale shurjo lukay!

^^ ei bhabe bhalo hoy na? ..ami just idea dilam arki..

Bhalo likhecho Andu bhaia but bangla te aro likho...practice korte thako...ar help lagle amake ask koiro...

angelmorn · #13 (**permalink**) 06-25-2007, 12:55 PM

Quote:

bisreshtho kalponik

Bisreshtho ki ?

Kintu bhaloi hoise

English poem ta keno jaani ektu beshi * Violent * laglo
But i liked the whole style of it
Proshno seemed more of a song than a poem. loved the first para

Keep Them coming Andy!

DarKsaInt · #14 (**permalink**) 06-25-2007, 01:16 PM

1st Time In Here ..........Jossssss poems Mystery_maKer Bro....I lyk Ur Poems

Mystery Maker · #15 (**permalink**) 06-27-2007, 03:58 AM

e jeno ek ondhokaar
akre dhore ache amae
koshto gulo jontronaar maajhe
haath bariye daakche amae.
aaynaai haath rekhe aami
chuye dekhi nijeke
bhenge feli shopno aajo
ei dushshopner raate.
ekhono taakiye achi
dushshopno kaatbe kokhon
phire paabo kokhon amaai
purano shopner maajhe.

4min e likhsi gaanta...i kno it sux!!!...but 4 mins...