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Old 07-18-2006, 10:07 PM
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Arrow tumi. [part II]

tumi.ami
ami.amar tumi.
tomar bhalobasha
amar beche thaka
tomar asha nirasha
amar lokkho
tomar osru
amar buke bedhe jawa teer
tomar hashi
amar ongone tomar karone choriye jawa phool
tomar mittha
amar shotto
tomar shotto'o
amar bishash
tomar nishongoto
amar chole jawa
tomar khob
amar nirabota
tomar proshno
amar mittha
tomar chole jawa
amar...
amar..
amar.
nishobdho raate tomar khoje eka hete jawa
amar shantona.

kichukhon ageh current chole gesilo...kisu korar chilo na...tai likhlam


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Well.. To tell u the truth 1st one ta beshi joss chilo.. Hoito oita beshi valo laagse dekhey eta otota touchy mone hochhena.. But note tht thts my very own opinion.. So never mind ..
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Old 07-18-2006, 11:36 PM
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trust me..i have the same views as you.amaro eta bhal lage nai...but ishtyll post korlam


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Ekta kotha mone rakbe, amra keu poet na. amra kebol matro chadke dekhte shikhechi.. valobashte shikhechi.. tobe takey dhorte amader aro shomoy lagbe : ).. asha kori, ami ki bolte cheyechi, bujte perecho.

Nicher kothagulo bodle felo...

Quote:
tomar mittha
amar shotto

and

 tomar proshno
amar mittha


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Old 07-19-2006, 12:33 AM
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It wus worth It! I jes luvd 'em..
tomar nishongoto
amar chole jawa
tomar khob
amar nirabota

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Old 07-19-2006, 11:52 AM
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valo hoyecche sis...
kisu jaygay petch kheye gese...
bepar nah..

keep it up


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Well, frm my point, the prev. one was better no doubt, but poems are nothing to compare with, each and everyone is unique.

This one is unique in its own metaphores, nice flow. But, at certain places things really got circled up, anyways as darkcrunk says, we ain't poets, we're just trying to catch the moon.

Keep it up! :thumb:

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well...2 tell u the truth i liked ur 1st 1 better....im not sayin this 1s bad im jus sayin....ummm how can i say this? uhhhhh.....sum movies r better without a sequel tho this poem was better than any crappy sequel 2 a blokbuster movie....this explanation is kinda weird but yeah.....(i dun get it much either )
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