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Old 07-24-2006, 05:51 PM
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Love tumi [part III]

tumi tumi tumi . .
amar adhare alo
amar odrisho ami
nodir jole amar protichobi
tumi
amar ghorir kata
amar shomoyer badha
amar arek ostitto
tumi


amar sporshe shihorito...tumi
amar ashai boshe thaka...tumi
amar bhalobashai shikto...tumi

amar sraboner megh.. tumi..
amar hridoyer spondone .. tumi..
amar raater adhaare.. jonakir alo..
amar bhorer akashe,harano shei tara..
tumi.. shudhu tumi .

brishti raate amar hashi ...tumi
jhochonar buke amar ostito...tumi
britter majhe lukiya rakha...tumi
dhushor prante amar shopno...tumi

morubhumir mrittur pare.. kalo megher brishti . .tumi
sritir majhe hariye jawa..amar protichobi.. tumi

adharer majhe aloker jhornadhara...tumi..
amar kadhe matha rekhe shopno dekha...tumi
onnonto khon cheye thaka mukhochobi...tumi

sheeter raate nilabh shei agun .. tumi
rokto sharir juddher majhe ..amar asroy . .. tumi

durei thekheo kache thakar ashaash...tumi
shobdoheen poth'a amar shahosh...tumi
amar tumi...shudhui tumi...
raate'r adhare amar shopno...tumi
shishir patai shubrothar majhe....tumi

ekaki ei jibone ..amar shongo . .tumi ..
amar jiboner araler bastobota .. tumi

amar opekkhar shutro tumi...
amar opekhar shesh...tumi

bhoyer raate.. amar shantona.. tumi..
boner fuler mishti shubhash . .tumi

amai chere chole jawar bhoi'er shutro...tumi
hariye fela'r bhoi amar...tumi


yes the last and final part of "tumi." this poem was not only done by me but also by darkcrunk who is mashaalah quite talented...the first para strts off by him..and me and him going on in alternate para's...

hope you will like it!




Ei deshe jah Paap Gunno, Onno deshe Punno Tai ....
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Old 07-24-2006, 06:00 PM
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lola.. Tumi fobia!!.. poem ta nice hoise but still first one is beshi joss.. I do beleive u shud write a poem named Ami..
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ahem . .so this is posted alas :P i have edited n changed my texts to italics.. hmm the first one is always nice : ) . .
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Old 07-24-2006, 07:23 PM
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hehe duet poem......nice one!!!!

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onek boro ekta valo kobita. tfs

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cooool....u guyz r bhery talented maashallah....ami mone hoy first time duet poem portesi...onek nice hoise..heheh......keep it up!

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Not only for the duet thingy but the sharing which is necessary to write a poem on this type of subjects, I discovered something.

Elongated theme, a lot of adjectives was used and metaphores as well. Its cool that you guys are coming up together with this creativity thing!!

Liked it, what you call the "unfold" of so many things in those lines.

‹‹‹ Ĥαήġίŋġ βεŧωєєŋ ίή-Ьєŧωεεŋήєѕѕ ›››


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really nice

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Khuubii valo hoise.. Really!!

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thundol thundol..boroi mochotkar likhecho..tumi thukku tomra!!


I see nothing in your eyes, and the more I see the less I like.
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